homework 2/7
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
HI JI!
Keep on studying very hard and I know you will become successful one day.
T. DON
My thought that the most important thing to succeed in life is honesty.
>>CORRECT
Having lived in the community of competive life, I exrerienced to meet diverse persons and to face various incidents.
>> Having lived in a community of a competitive life, I experienced meeting people in all walks of life and face different challenges.
Finally, I was known that the succeed comes through having honesty when I faced alot of chances that have a possibility of succeed.
>> Finally, I figured out that success comes by being honest when an opportunity knocks which can lead to become successful.
There is no quuestion that the dishonesty lead the failure.
>> There is no doubt that dishonesty can lead to failure.
When I was [이름], I often tried to have a cheating to other persons for getting more money but I lost my reputation.
>> When I was [이름], I often tried to cheat people for money but I lost my reputation and self respect.
Recently, I always give them my faithful mind because it give me a chance of success.
>> Nowadays, I showed people that I can be trusted because it can give me the chance to be successful.
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