Homework 2
학생이 쓴 원문
Secondly, people can learn other country\'s culture from the Internet because they can communicate with local people directly. For instance, in Korea, there is an application “Hello Talk” which allows people to share their culture and teach their own language. So, people can talk with local people whenever they want. After this application launched, the number of foreign tourists in Korea is increasing because they want to experience Korea\'s culture in person, and they also enjoy meeting people who teached Korean culture. Therefore, it is apparent that using internet allows people to learn other countury’s culture from local people.
To sum up, I believe that there are many ways to understand the culture of a country such as the Internet, books, and videos, so people can learn other country\'s culture without speaking their own language.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
The second part is much better.
I like the way you gave a concrete example to explain your point.
It was very clear and expressive.
Keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Secondly, people can learn other country\'s culture from the Internet because they can communicate with local people directly. >> Secondly, people can learn about another country\'s culture from the Internet because they can communicate with local people directly.
For instance, in Korea, there is an application “Hello Talk” which allows people to share their culture and teach their own language.
>> For instance, in Korea, there is an application called, “Hello Talk” ,which allows people to share their culture and teach their own language.
So, people can talk with local people whenever they want.
>> Correct
After this application launched, the number of foreign tourists in Korea is increasing because they want to experience Korea\'s culture in person, and they also enjoy meeting people who teached Korean culture.
>> After this application was launched, the number of foreign tourists in Korea kept increasing because they want to experience Korea\'s culture in person, and they also enjoy meeting people who teach Korean culture.
Therefore, it is apparent that using internet allows people to learn other countury’s culture from local people.
>> Therefore, it is apparent that using the Internet allows people to learn about another country\'s culture from local people.
To sum up, I believe that there are many ways to understand the culture of a country such as the Internet, books, and videos, so people can learn other country\'s culture without speaking their own language.
>> To sum up, I believe that there are many ways to understand the culture of a country such as the Internet, books, and videos, so people can learn another country\'s culture without speaking their own language.
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