Homework 2
학생이 쓴 원문
1.what do you want to accomplish in the first thirty days of this job?
->If I work for the Timor-Leste Treasury Department, I will first try to build friendly relations with local employees for a month and will focus on collecting information on the national debt risk management system.
2.What has been the most rewarding experience of your career thus far?
->I have been a branch manager for 14 years at Hana Bank. As a branch manager, I have experienced a number of volunteer activities in the community. It was worthwhile to experience social contribution to the community through financial and talent donations.
3.Who has impacted you most in your career?
-> My father passed away when I was 11 years old. I was the youngest of four sons and two daughters. I grew up under the guidance and influence of my older brother after my father died
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
I want to commend you for your well-written compositions. See you tomorrow for our last day! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
->If I work for the Timor-Leste Treasury Department, I will first try to build friendly relations with local employees for a month and will focus on collecting information on the national debt risk management system.
>>CORRECT!
2.What has been the most rewarding experience of your career thus far?
->I have been a branch manager for 14 years at Hana Bank. As a branch manager, I have experienced a number of volunteer activities in the community. It was worthwhile to experience social contribution to the community through financial and talent donations.
2.What has been the most rewarding experience of your career thus far?
->I have been a branch manager for 14 years at Hana Bank. As a branch manager, I have experienced a number of volunteer activities in the community. It was worthwhile to experience social contribution to the community through financial and talent donations.
>>I have been a branch manager for 14 years at Hana Bank. As a branch manager, I have experienced a number of volunteer activities in the community. It was worthwhile to experience contributing to the community through financial and talent donations.
3.Who has impacted you most in your career?
-> My father passed away when I was 11 years old. I was the youngest of four sons and two daughters. I grew up under the guidance and influence of my older brother after my father died.
3.Who has impacted you most in your career?
-> My father passed away when I was 11 years old. I was the youngest of four sons and two daughters. I grew up under the guidance and influence of my older brother after my father died.
>>CORRECT!
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