Homework 20
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. What are some things that corporations can do to help the environment?
A. Corporations can help the environment by using less papers and less energy. There are so many paper works that we can change into electronic documents. Furthermore one of the major companies made an agreement with overseas company by VR technology, which can also save energy for transportation as well as paper. Many companies tend to use too much energy of air conditioner which is the major reason that causes air pollution and global warming. Using less energy would change the environment better.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bomi! Thank you for spending a little of your time with your homework. I really appreciate your effort and your consistency in improving your skills. Please continue doing so! ^ ^
Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this one. There are actually so many ways to help us conserve energy and protect the environment. But the evils of men have caused so much damage and it seems irreparable. Sometimes I couldn\'t help to think that with all of the things happening, nature is punishing us because of our misdeeds. I hope we learn our lesson before it\'s too late.
-Teacher Jedah
Corporations can help the environment by using less papers and less
energy.
>>CORRECT (*less paper)
There are so many paper works that we can change into electronic
documents.
>>CORRECT OR
>>We can shift into paperless transactions.
Furthermore one of the major companies made an agreement
with overseas company by VR technology, which can also save energy for
transportation as well as paper.
>>Furthermore, major companies can engage business and make agreements to overseas companies via VR technology, this can save energy for transportation as well as the use of paper.
Many companies tend to use too much
energy of air conditioner which is the major reason that causes air
pollution and global warming.
>>Many companies tend to use too much energy for their air conditioner, one major reason for air pollution and global warming.
Using less energy would change the
environment better.
>>Using less energy would help the environment a lot.
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