Homework(2013/07/23)
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What are the reasons why there are a lot of obese people nowadays?
Overeating is surely the main cause of obesity.
In case of Korea, There was no obese people before 1970.
Because, Korea wasn't wealthy for eating.^^
But nowadays, Korea is wealthy for eating. And a lot of people get over weight.
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What are the reasons why there are a lot of obese people nowadays?Overeating is surely the main cause of obesity.
>> CORRECT!! In case of Korea, There was no obese people before 1970.
>> In case of Korea, There were no obese people before 1970.Because, Korea wasn\'t wealthy for eating.^^
>> Because, Korea wasn\'t wealthy to eat a lot.^^But nowadays, Korea is wealthy for eating. And a lot of people get over weight.
>> But nowadays, Korea is wealthy already so a lot of people put on weight.
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