homework
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1.I guess it's very good for marketing. But it's so expensive when you want to advertising by broadcasting and internet. But, you can use to SNS for marketing that is free. In addition, it's more easy way to inform the people who live all over the world.
2. Nowdays, many advertisement have a sexual and violent which are affected by adolescents mental. So, if you want to good advertisement, you don't take any those things.
3. Young generations can use internet for compared to each products price, quality and A/S. That's the why I cannot easily peruaded by ad. But, senior citizens usaully don't use internet. That's the reason they are likely to use the ad.
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T. Jeny ^^
1. I guess it\'s very good for marketing.
>>> Correct
But it\'s so expensive when you want to advertising by broadcasting and internet.
>>> But it\'s so expensive when you want to advertise through broadcasting and internet.
But, you can use to SNS for marketing that is free.
>>> But you can use SNS marketing that is free.
In addition, it\'s more easy way to inform the people who live all over the world.
>>> It addition, it is an easier way to inform people all over the world.2. Nowdays, many advertisement have a sexual and violent which are affected by adolescents mental.
>>> Many advertisements nowadays have a sexual and violent content which affects the adolescents mentality.
So, if you want to good advertisement, you don\'t take any those things.
>>> So, if you want to have a good advertisement, you shouldn\'t take any of those things.
3. Young generations can use internet for compared to each products price, quality and A/S.
>>> Young generations can use internet to compare each products price, quality and A/S.
That\'s the why I cannot easily peruaded by ad.
>>> That\'s the reason why I am not easily persuaded by ad.
But, senior citizens usaully don\'t use internet.
>>> But senior citizens don\'t usually use the internet.
That\'s the reason they are likely to use the ad.
>>> Correct
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