Homework#21
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, Joylin! It\'s coming soon Thanks giving day in Korea. So, I\'m expecting about that because I would meet my cousins in 6 months.
HW#21 What are you saving your money for?
Umm.. This question make me reflect on my past... I didn\'t save my money well.. So, I will tell about my girlfriend way to save her money.
First, she use a pocket money diary whenever she use her money. I think that\'s why she can save money. She said that \"the diary show how much use my money easily. So, if I spend much money, I can find what is the most expenditure. And then, I reduce it.\"
Secondly, she use only check card. The check card means that she can use money only when she has money in bankbook.
She also said that \"if you use a credit card, you could abuse your money when you don\'t have it. So, I recommend you use Only check card. it makes you save your money\"
강사 첨삭
Hello Jonathan!
Wow! Chuseok is really a big celebration.
I envy you. You will meet your cousins and hang out together.
I\'m sure you will have a great time!
Here are my corrections.
This question make me reflect on my past... I didn\'t save my money well.. So, I will tell about my girlfriend way to save her money.
>>This question makes me reflect on my past. I didn\'t save my money well. So, I will tell my girlfriend about ways on how to save her money.
First, she use a pocket money diary whenever she use her money. I think that\'s why she can save money. She said that \"the diary show how much use my money easily.
>>First, she writes in her pocket money diary whenever she uses her money. I think that\'s why she can save money. She said that, \" The diary shows how much I use my money easily.\"
So, if I spend much money, I can find what is the most expenditure. And then, I reduce it.\"
>>So, if I spend much money, I can find the most expended part and then, I reduce it.
Secondly, she use only check card. The check card means that she can use money only when she has money in bankbook.
>>Secondly, she uses only check card. Using the check card means that she can spend money only when she has money in her bank book.
She also said that \"if you use a credit card, you could abuse your money when you don\'t have it. So, I recommend you use Only check card. it makes you save your money\"
>>She also said that \" If you use a credit card, you could abuse your money when you don\'t have it. So, I recommend you using check card only. It helps you save your money.
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