homework
학생이 쓴 원문
1. I think it's kink of wrong opinion like gender, age and educational background.
2. People can be affected by ad, books and opinions that contain the wrong information.
3. I attended on forum last week which subects is Global Women Economy Forum. Many celebrities who women politicians, professors came from USA,Europe and Korea, former CEO of HP attended at there. They talked about how many women regarded in our society, why prejudice, especially for women, exists until now and how can women overcome it. Women have been received prejudice all industies until now. That's ture and pesonally, it's sad situation.
4. Women is now spread of many industies but most of them cannot promote high position in their company. Most of politicians, goverment officers and CEO of all industies occupy by men. So, we should give more chance for women their better future.
강사 첨삭
Hello there.^^Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with no hesitations.I actually feel for you.We are likely on the same boat.Let us just hope that sooner or later, there will come a time that all these sorts of sexism, even racism, will be totally eliminated.Let us cross our fingers on this one.^^Enjoy your day!_T.Jeny^^1. I think it\'s kink of wrong opinion like gender, age and educational background. >> I think it is kink to give opinions regarding gender, age, and educational background.2. People can be affected by ad, books and opinions that contain the wrong information. >> Correct3. I attended on forum last week which subects is Global Women Economy Forum. >> I attended a forum last week whose subject is on Global Women Economy.Many celebrities who women politicians, professors came from USA,Europe and Korea, former CEO of HP attended at there.>> Many celebrities who are women politicians and professors came from USA, Europe and Korea. The former COE of HP was also there. They talked about how many women regarded in our society, why prejudice, especially for women, exists until now and how can women overcome it. >> They talked about how many women are regarded with high esteem in our society and why prejudices for women exist until now including the ways to overcome such.Women have been received prejudice all industies until now. >> Women have been prejudiced in all industries up to this day.That\'s ture and pesonally, it\'s sad situation.>> That\'s true and personally, it is a sad situation.4. Women is now spread of many industies but most of them cannot promote high position in their company. >> Women are now part of many industries but most of them are not promoted to high positions.Most of politicians, goverment officers and CEO of all industies occupy by men. >> Most of the politicians, government officers and CEOs of all industries are men.So, we should give more chance for women their better future.>> So, we should give more chance to women for them to have a better future.
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