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2012-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Do you agree that there's too much violence on TV? Yes, I agree. That's too much violence on tv these days. The biggest problem is that kids can have easy access to it. They are affected by it a lot. And it's difficult to keep an eyes on them. It's horrible to hear about an imitation crime. Besides more and more peaple are getting used to brutality. We need more effective way to control this problem.

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Hello there.^^Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts about this matter.Your laments sure make sense and that I do feel the same way.Just be careful in your sentence construction, okay?Have a great day!_T.Grace^^HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:Do you agree that there\'s too much violence on TV? Yes, I agree. That\'s too much violence on tv these days.>> Yes. I agree that there are too much violence on TV these days.The biggest problem is that kids can have easy access to it.>> CorrectThey are affected by it a lot.>> CorrectAnd it\'s difficult to keep an eyes on them.>> And it is difficult to keep an eye on them.It\'s horrible to hear about an imitation crime.>> It\'s horrible to hear about an imitation of a crime.Besides more and more peaple are getting used to brutality.>> Besides, more people are getting used to brutality.We need more effective way to control this problem.>> We need more effective ways to control this problem.

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