homework
학생이 쓴 원문
1. Major religions are three that Christ, Buddist and Islam but we don't have no idea of how many religions are in the world because local religions are incalculable.
2. Sure, it helps to my life. In addition, I'm a Christion.
3. Christ is the No.1 religion in Korea. End of Dynasty of Chosun, about 1905, some Christian missionary came to here for spread of Christ. At that time, Chosun believed Buddist that history is very long so that they didn't want to receive it at first and some missionary were killed by people.
4. It's helpful to our life and control mind to be optimistic. It's just my opinion.
Actually, my parents are also Christian so I went together church with my parents every sunday since I was very young. Some people asked me why we have a religion and what is benefit to you but I don't mind that. Just believe and pray the Jesus.
강사 첨삭
Religion is a rather sensitive thing for most people. It causes tension and misunderstandings for people from different religions. I suppose, we all need to just keep an open mind and always remember that each religions have different practices but doesn\'t necessarily mean the other one is more accepted or proper than the other. I\'m impressed at how well you tried to give details to your answer. I hope to one day talk more about this with you sometime in the future. ^^
T. Jeny
1. Major religions are three that Christ, Buddist and Islam but we don\'t have no idea of how many religions are in the world because local religions are incalculable.
>>There are three major religions, Christianism, Buddhism and islam but we don\'t have any idea how many religions there are in the world because there are too many local religions.2. Sure, it helps to my life. In addition, I\'m a Christion.
>>Sure, it helps in my life. In addition, I\'m a Christian.3. Christ is the No.1 religion in Korea.
>>Christianism is the No. 1 religion in Korea.
End of Dynasty of Chosun, about 1905, some Christian missionary came to here for spread of Christ.
>>During the end of the Chosun Dynasty about 1905, some Christian missionary came here to spread Christianity.
At that time, Chosun believed Buddist that history is very long so that they didn\'t want to receive it at first and some missionary were killed by people.
>>At that time, Chosun only believed in Buddism since it\'s been a part of the history for a very long time so they didn\'t want to accept it. Therefore, some missionaries were killed by people.4. It\'s helpful to our life and control mind to be optimistic.
>>It\'s helpful in our life and keeps us optimistic.
It\'s just my opinion.
>>Correct!
Actually, my parents are also Christian so I went together church with my parents every sunday since I was very young.
>>Actually, my parents are also Christians so I went with them to church every Sunday since I was very young.
Some people asked me why we have a religion and what is benefit to you but I don\'t mind that.
>>Some people asked me why we have a religion and what are the benefits to me but I don\'t mind that.
Just believe and pray the Jesus.
>>I just believe and pray to Jesus.
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