homework 21st Dec.

2018-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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1. occupation / job / profession / work Among young generation, many people prefer to have office works because there are a negative perception regarding blue color jobs. Therefore, when they choose an occupation, they consider about whether it is profession or not. 2. society / general public / people With the development in technology, many devices such as computers and smart phones have been using in people's daily life in modern society. I think it has influence on general public both positive and negative ways. 3. challenging Many people are challenging to get a promotion or a high position in their works. 4. manual labor / physical work done for wages Construction needs a range of manual labor which is physical work done for wages. 5. nonprofessional jobs / professional jobs There are nonprofessional jobs and professional jobs. I could say that it is nonprofessional jobs that the works don't need special skills, such as cleaning, delivery or factory work. Contrastiv

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

Thank you for sending your homework.

Cheers!
Jean

1. occupation / job / profession / work
Among young generation, many people prefer to have office works because there are a negative perception regarding blue color jobs.
>> Among the young generation, countless individuals prefer to have office work owing to the negative perception regarding blue collar jobs.

Therefore, when they choose an occupation, they consider about whether it is profession or not.
>> Therefore, when they choose an occupation, they consider whether it is a professional one or not.

2. society / general public / people
With the development in technology, many devices such as computers and smart phones have been using in people\'s daily life in modern society.
>> With the development and evolution in technology, many devices such as computer and smart phones have been a constant tool in people\'s daily life in this modern society.

I think it has influence on general public both positive and negative ways.
>> I think it has an influence on the general public, both positive and negative ways.
>> or: To my way of thinking, it has both positive and negative influence on the general public.

3. challenging
Many people are challenging to get a promotion or a high position in their works.
>> Many people find it challenging to get a promotion or a high position at work.

4. manual labor / physical work done for wages
Construction needs a range of manual labor which is physical work done for wages.
>> Construction work needs a range of manual labor, which involves physical work done for wages.

5. nonprofessional jobs / professional jobs
There are nonprofessional jobs and professional jobs.
>> There are numerous nonprofessional and professional jobs in the world.

I could say that it is nonprofessional jobs that the works don\'t need special skills, such as cleaning, delivery or factory work.
>> I could say that nonprofessional jobs such as cleaning, delivery, or factory work don\'t necessarily need special skills.

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