homework 22

2016-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Would the world be better if there were a more equal distribution of wealth? Why/not? distribution of wealth is important agenda at this world. there are lots of debate about distribution of wealth along various scholar until now. And we can divide the world at a 3 kind of people ; the rich, middle, the poor. But this world is managed by the rich. their portion is a few number of entire. The money earned them is too huge to use as a human. As much as that, the poor can't have a human rights especially at third world. Because the rich steal the chance to grow themselves as possessing the market. When the world solve the agenda, it will be better living to poor people.

강사 첨삭

Hi there my dear, happy Monday! Thank you so much for doing your homework. I am glad to have read your homework, very good job!I hope you will keep up the good work... Take care always and have a great day! xoxoTeacher Cam^^ Would the world be better if there were a more equal distribution of wealth? Why/not?distribution of wealth is important agenda at this world. >>Distribution os wealth is important in this world. there are lots of debate about distribution of wealth along various scholar until now.>>correctAnd we can divide the world at a 3 kind of people ; the rich, middle, the poor.>>correctBut this world is managed by the rich. their portion is a few number of entire.>>correctThe money earned them is too huge to use as a human.>>The money they earned is as huge as the number of population.As much as that, the poor can\'t have a human rights especially at third world.>>correctBecause the rich steal the chance to grow themselves as possessing the market.>>correctWhen the world solve the agenda, it will be better living to poor people. >>correct

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