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2012-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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When I became parents, I know that parenting is really hard and I want to say my parents thank you. I really didn't expect before. Parenting is a tough but, baby gives us more tired than happy. Nowadays, many couple don't want to have a baby or hesitate to pregnant second or third baby because they think if they have a baby, they're not free anymore in related to their pricate life and too much spend money to raise. But, In light of my experience, of course it's not long time to parenting until now, I have to advise them that baby is the most precious present to you and it's a priceless. It's the No.1 asset in your life. Money, jewelry and others, in my opinion, there is no comparison. I should want to ask couple who don't want to baby that are you happy now? If you have a baby, you'll be more happy, more smile. To be a parents. Then, you're in the new world like heaven.

강사 첨삭

An Enticing Monday to you! I\'m very impressed on your ideas on this composition. I can see how you give importance to family and bearing a child. That\'s right. having a child is both a gift and an on-going challenge for a parent.^^ I hope you\'re always up for the challenge! See you soon.^^ -- T. Jeny When I became parents, I know that parenting is really hard and I want to say my parents thank you. >> When I become a parent, I knew that parenting is really hard and I want to thank my parents. I really didn\'t expect before. >> Correct! >> OR I didn\'t expect that I will become a parent before. Parenting is a tough but, baby gives us more tired than happy. >> Parenting is tough but the baby makes us more tired than happy. Nowadays, many couple don\'t want to have a baby or hesitate to pregnant second or third baby because they think if they have a baby, they\'re not free anymore in related to their pricate life and too much spend money to raise. >> Nowadays, many couples don\'t want to have a baby or they hesitate to get pregnant for the second or third baby because they think that if they have a baby, they\'re not free anymore in relation to their private life and it takes too much money to raise a child. But, In light of my experience, of course it\'s not long time to parenting until now, >> But, in light of my experience, of course it didn\'t take long enough. I have to advise them that baby is the most precious present to you and it\'s a priceless. >> I have to advice them that a baby is the most precious present to you and it\'s priceless. It\'s the No.1 asset in your life. >> Correct! Money, jewelry and others, in my opinion, there is no comparison.  >> There is no comparison with money, jewelry and other precious things. I should want to ask couple who don\'t want to baby that are you happy now? >> I should ask some couples who don\'t want to have a baby if they are happy enough. If you have a baby, you\'ll be more happy, more smile.  >>  If you have a baby, you\'ll be happier and you\'ll smile more.  To be a parents. Then, you\'re in the new world like heaven. >> To be a parent, you\'re in a new world like heaven.

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