Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hey there!
You chose a very good topic for your composition. You have a very good stress-relieving activities.
Remind me to tell you about how I manage my stress, okay?
You have a great evening ahead! See yah!
T.Jeny
Hello. Jeny.
>>>Hello Jeny.
I tried to writing an essay.
>>>I tried to write an essay.
>>>I tried writing an essay.
Have a good dinner.
>>>Correct!
>>>You can also say: Enjoy your dinner!
I\'d like to talk about the managing stress.
>>>I\'d like to talk about managing stress.
>>>I\'d like to talk about stress management.
Most people face with the stressful situation everyday.
>>>Most people face stressful situations everyday.
Especially, when they have an important thing that can effect on their life I think, the situation makes them feel nervous.
>>>People tend to be anxious when dealing with things which can affect their lives.
But we cannot avoid this kind of stress.
>>>However, we cannot avoid stressful situations.
Because It\'s the part of our life.
>>>These are part of our lives.
So, managing stress is a significant ability for success.
>>>Stress management is an effective way for us to be successful in life.
There are many ways to decrease the stress.
>>>There are many ways to relieve stress.
First, do not think the situation seriously.
>>>First, do not think of the situation too seriously.
It makes our feelings more nervous and interrupt other productive thinkings.
>>>If we do this, it will only make us feel more nervous and it will interrupt our productive thinking.
Second, having some hobbies to solve the stress.
>>>Second, we have to have hobbies which can help us relieve our stress.
Exercise, such as running, swimming, playing football game will be very good for reducing stress.
>>>Doing exercise such as running, swimming, playing football game and others will be very helpful in managing our stress.
In my case, I play the piano and dance salsa to feel better.
>>>In my case, I play the piano and I also dance salsa in order to feel better.
How about you Jenny?
>>>Correct!
What is your best way to feel better?
>>>What do you do to manage your stress?
>>>How do you manage your stress?
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