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2012-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Hello. Jeny. I tried to writing an essay. Have a good dinner. I'd like to talk about the managing stress. Most people face with the stressful situation everyday. Especially, when they have an important thing that can effect on their life I think, the situation makes them feel nervous. But we cannot avoid this kind of stress. Because It's the part of our life. So, managing stress is a significant ability for success. There are many ways to decrease the stress. First, do not think the situation seriously. It makes our feelings more nervous and interrupt other productive thinkings. Second, having some hobbies to solve the stress. Exercise, such as running, swimming, playing football game will be very good for reducing stress. In my case, I play the piano and dance salsa to feel better. How about you Jenny? What is your best way to feel better?

강사 첨삭

Hey there!

You chose a very good topic for your composition. You have a very good stress-relieving activities.

Remind me to tell you about how I manage my stress, okay?

You have a great evening ahead! See yah!

T.Jeny

Hello. Jeny.

>>>Hello Jeny.
I tried to writing an essay.

>>>I tried to write an essay.

>>>I tried writing an essay.
Have a good dinner.

>>>Correct!

>>>You can also say: Enjoy your dinner!
I\'d like to talk about the managing stress.

>>>I\'d like to talk about managing stress.

>>>I\'d like to talk about stress management.
Most people face with the stressful situation everyday.

>>>Most people face stressful situations everyday.
Especially, when they have an important thing that can effect on their life I think, the situation makes them feel nervous.
>>>People tend to be anxious when dealing with things which can affect their lives.

But we cannot avoid this kind of stress.
>>>However, we cannot avoid stressful situations.

Because It\'s the part of our life.

>>>These are part of our lives.

So, managing stress is a significant ability for success.
>>>Stress management is an effective way for us to be successful in life.

There are many ways to decrease the stress.
>>>There are many ways to relieve stress.

First, do not think the situation seriously.

>>>First, do not think of the situation too seriously.

 It makes our feelings more nervous and interrupt other productive thinkings.
>>>If we do this, it will only make us feel more nervous and it will interrupt our productive thinking.

Second, having some hobbies to solve the stress.
>>>Second, we have to have hobbies which can help us relieve our stress.

Exercise, such as running, swimming, playing football game will be very good for reducing stress.
>>>Doing exercise such as running, swimming, playing football game and others will be very helpful in managing our stress.

In my case, I play the piano and dance salsa to feel better.

>>>In my case, I play the piano and I also dance salsa in order to feel better.
How about you Jenny?

>>>Correct!

What is your best way to feel better?

>>>What do you do to manage your stress?

>>>How do you manage your stress?

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