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Diabetes is dangerous disease and it is heredity by your child. If you have a diatetes, you must be exercise too hard. Most reason, when you're a diabetes, is a salt food. Salt is essential our body but, if it's too enough it's a posion. It causes many disease. Diabetes is so difficult subject and I don't have too much medical knolwdege so, I have to finish.
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Hello there.^^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts regarding this one even if you are not quite familiar with it.
You just have to go over my corrections, if you have time.^^
Take care!
T.Jeny^^
Diabetes is dangerous disease and it is heredity by your child.
>> Diabetes is a dangerous disease and it is hereditary.
If you have a diatetes, you must be exercise too hard.
>> If you have diabetes, you must exercise hard.
Most reason, when you\'re a diabetes, is a salt food.
>> The reason for having diabetes is eating salty food.
Salt is essential our body but, if it\'s too enough it\'s a posion.
>> Salt is essential to our body but when it is taken in in a large amount, it can be poisonous.
It causes many disease.
>> It causes many diseases.
Diabetes is so difficult subject and I don\'t have too much medical knolwdege so, I have to finish.
>> Diabetes is a broad subject matter and I don\'t have too much medical knowledge, so I have to end my discussion here.^^
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