homework
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Hi.
I think you are very tired because you early get up on weekdays.
Nevertheless, thank you for kindly correcting my sentence and calling me every day.
Here is my homework.
Tell me about your favorite part in the movie Breaking Dawn 2. Explain why.
I watched the movie Breaking Dawn 2. The fight scene was interesting.
The Cullens fought with The Volturi to protect Renesmee. The scene was very dynamic.
In fact, this story differ the movie and the book. In the book, they didn’t fight because Alice shows the person who is half human and half vampire to Aro, The Volturi’s reader the minute she appears in the scene. So Aro realized that Renesmee is safe and left there with The Volturi. I think if producer intactly had made the movie with the book’s story, the movie might be not fun. Anyway, I am sorry to watch the final series. I will never forget it.
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GOOD MORNING, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking some time off to do your homework. I finally saw the movie yesterday and I couldn\'t agree with you more. The fight scene is my favorite part of the movie as well. It\'s action packed and I loved it! Actually, the producer of the movie and the author of the book is the same person. Although, I feel tired from waking up very early in the morning, I still feel happy because I get to talk to you. You are so warm and accommodating in all our classes.
Hi.
>>CORRECT!I think you are very tired because you early get up on weekdays.>>CORRECT!
Nevertheless, thank you for kindly correcting my sentence and calling me every day.>>Nevertheless, thank you for correcting kindly my sentences and calling me everyday.Here is my homework.>>CORRECT!Tell me about your favorite part in the movie Breaking Dawn 2.
>>CORRECT!
Explain why.>>CORRECT!I watched the movie Breaking Dawn 2.
>>CORRECT!
The fight scene was interesting.
>>CORRECT!The Cullens fought with The Volturi to protect Renesmee.
>>CORRECT!
The scene was very dynamic.
>>CORRECT!In fact, this story differ the movie and the book.
>>In fact, the story in the movie differs from the book.
In the book, they didn’t fight because Alice shows the person who is half human and half vampire to Aro, The Volturi’s reader the minute she appears in the scene.
>>In the book, they didn\'t fight because Alice showed a person who is half human and half vampire to Aro, the Volturi leader, the minute she arrived at the scene.
So Aro realized that Renesmee is safe and left there with The Volturi.
>>Aro then realized that Renesmee is safe and left with the Volturies.
I think if producer intactly had made the movie with the book’s story, the movie might be not fun.
>>I think if the producer intactly made the movie like it is narrated on the book, the movie might not be fun.
Anyway, I am sorry to watch the final series.
>>Anyway, I am sad that this is the final installment.
I will never forget it.
>>CORRECT!
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