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2012-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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1.I tried to have a healthy life style that hitting the gym, enough sleep, no smoking, not too much drink and to eat slow food. 2. Yes, I think it's possible when you have strong mind to have a healthy life style. Because nowadays, around our life, has a many harmful like smoke, drink, online game even drug. So, your mind to have a healthy life style is very important. 3. First of all, it is help to your body. I think that healthy is the best, it's priceless. When you lost your healthy, you cannot make money, any activities life and cannot meet your friends. What do you think about disabled people life or sicker life? Healthy is a bless. We should try to health our body. 4. To make happy, enjoyable life with your family, friends, relatives and co-workers.

강사 첨삭

Hello there,

I encourage you to to assess yourself and set up your goals, these goals are ownership or your learnings. So start setting up your goals if life and especially in setting up your goals in learning English these are your treasures.I can see you your potentials in speaking keep it up.!!!!
T, Jeny

1.I tried to have a healthy life style that hitting the gym, enough sleep, no smoking, not too much drink and to eat slow food.

>>I try to have a healthy lifestyle like hitting the gym, having enough sleep, not smoking, not drinking too much and eating healthy foods.

 2. Yes, I think it\'s possible when you have strong mind to have a healthy life style.

>>correct 

Because nowadays, around our life, has a many harmful like smoke, drink, online game even drug.

>> Because nowadays, there are a lot of harmful influences in our life such as smoke, liquor, drugs and even online games.

So, your mind to have a healthy life style is very important. 

>>So, having a healthy lifestyle is very important.

3. First of all, it is help to your body.

>>First of all, it is helpful to your body.

I think that healthy is the best, it\'s priceless.

>>I think that being healthy is priceless.

>>I think having a healthy body is the best and it\'s priceless.

When you lost your healthy, you cannot make money, any activities life and cannot meet your friends.

>>When you are not healthy, you cannot make money, you cannot do any activities and you cannot meet your friends

What do you think about disabled people life or sicker life?

>>What can you say about a disabled person or a person who is sick?

>>What can you say about the lives of a disabled and sick person?

Healthy is a bless.

>> Being healthy is a blessing.

We should try to health our body.

>>We should try to make our body healthy.

4. To make happy, enjoyable life with your family, friends, relatives and co-workers.

>>To make your lives happy, enjoy it with your family, friends, relatives and co-workers.

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