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2012-12-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

1. Stressful always exists. When I do work, do excercise, talk to someone even drive. 2. I guess there're some positive ways such as meet friends to talk, eat dilicious foods, go to travel and shopping, dance or drive. 3. I guess there're also some negative ways like too much drink, smoke or break some goods. 4. When I have stress, I try to shower with hot water and graceful body wash. When I do my military service, I found it's helpful to eradicate my stress. In military, our acts were so limitted. So, I had to find new way to delete my stress and finally, I found it.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

Oh yeah, that stres! It\'s making people look ugly, right! So I think pampering oneself is the best way to remove stress. ^^ By the way, I commend you for doing your homework tonihgt. It is highly appreciated. By the way, some corrections are made below. Please review them. Good night! ^

~T. Jeny

1. Stressful always exists. When I do work, do excercise, talk to someone even drive.

>>Stress always exists - when i do work, exercise, talk to someone, and even when I drive.
2. I guess there\'re some positive ways such as meet friends to talk, eat dilicious foods, go to travel and shopping, dance or drive.

>>I guess meeting friends, eating delicious foods, travel, shopping, dancing, or driving are ways to remove stress.
3. I guess there\'re also some negative ways like too much drink, smoke or break some goods.

>>I guess there are also negative acts such as drinking, smoking, and breaking something that may remove stress.
4. When I have stress, I try to shower with hot water and graceful body wash.

>>When I am stressed, I am taking a hot shower with body wash.

When I do my military service, I found it\'s helpful to eradicate my stress.

>>When I was doing my military service, I found it helpful to eradicate my stress.

 In military, our acts were so limitted.

>>In military, our movements were so limited.

So, I had to find new way to delete my stress and finally, I found it.

>>Correct!

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