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2012-12-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Adultery is strictly limitted by law but, some men and women don't follow it. It's terrible behabior and if you want to keep your family, you must don't do it. It's painful for your wife, daughters and sons. I heard that some middle east counties have permited it long time ago because they had to prepare war so, population was very important. I don't know how is exactly inform. In opposite, some middle east counties strongly punished adultery people such as burn and throw stone. Actually, two months ago, in Nigeria, happend burn people. They were men who had sexual assult mom and daughter. Citizens catched them and burned. In order to keep the peace, we should strongly punished sometimes. Adultery is betray behabior to their partners. It's support to break each other's trust.

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The object of education is to prepare the young to educate themselves throughout their lives. in our daily activities we can learn new things. Preparing yourself with all the challenges in life is just a trial for you to move forward. 
T. Jeny

Adultery is strictly limitted by law but, some men and women don\'t follow it

>>Adultery is strictly limited by law but some men and women don\'t follow it.

>> Adultery is strictly prohibited by law but some men and women don\'t follow it.

 It\'s terrible behabior and if you want to keep your family, you must don\'t do it.

>>It\'s a terrible behavior that you mustn\'t do, if you want to keep your family.

 It\'s painful for your wife, daughters and sons.

>>It\'s painful for your wife, daughter and sons.

>>It\'s painful for your family.

 I heard that some middle east counties have permited it long time ago because they had to prepare war so, population was very important.

>>I heard that some middle east countries permit it because they want to increase their population to prepare for war.

 I don\'t know how is exactly inform.

>>I don\'t know exactly about this information.

 In opposite, some middle east counties strongly punished adultery people such as burn and throw stone.

>>But some middle east countries strongly punished people,who commits adultery like burning and throwing stones at them.

Actually, two months ago, in Nigeria, happend burn people.

>>Actually, in Nigeria they burned people two months ago.

They were men who had sexual assult mom and daughter.

>>The men had sexual assault with their moms and daughters.

Citizens catched them and burned.

>>Citizens caught and burned them.
In order to keep the peace, we should strongly punished sometimes.

>>We should strongly punish them to keep our country peaceful.

>>Sometimes we need to punish them to maintain peace.

 Adultery is betray behabior to their partners.

>>Adultery is a way of betrayal to their parents.

 It\'s support to break each other\'s trust.

>>It can break trust.

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