Homework#24
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Hi, Joylin! Nowadays, the weather is nice. Fall is here! I want to go on a trip but I can\'t do it because I have to prepare personality and aptitude test.:( My friend is traveling around the world from August and I am planning to go with him in December.
HW#24 How will low birth rate and aging population affect the economy?
I think jobs are the most affected area because of low birth rate and aging.
Service sectors will gradually disappear because population is declining.
So, the machine will be replaced to service people.
In the future, the machines would work in every field, not in just service sectors.
In addition, people\'s hobbies will change.
The most of them have hobbies which is sports like soccer, basketball, baseball and so on.
But, They will gradually disappear because to do them need many people.
So, I think they will be replaced other hobbies like computer games or reading a book.
I don\'t mean it is good hobbies. but, I think it\'s going to deepen individualism.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jonathan!
Happy Fall Season!
Here are my corrections.
I think jobs are the most affected area because of low birth rate and aging.
>>Correct!
Service sectors will gradually disappear because population is declining.
>>Correct!
So, the machine will be replaced to service people.
>>Correct!
In the future, the machines would work in every field, not in just service sectors.
>>In the future, the machines would work in every fields, not just in the service sectors.
In addition, people\'s hobbies will change.
>>Correct!
The most of them have hobbies which is sports like soccer, basketball, baseball and so on.
>>Most of them have hobbies which are sports like soccer, basketball, baseball, and so on.
But, They will gradually disappear because to do them need many people.
>>But, they will gradually disappear because it requires teams to play them.
So, I think they will be replaced other hobbies like computer games or reading a book.
>>So, I think they will be replaced to other hobbies like computer games or reading books.
I don\'t mean it is good hobbies. but, I think it\'s going to deepen individualism.
>>I don\'t mean it is good hobbies. But, I think it\'s going to deepen individualism.
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