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Hello [이름],

Death is really inevitable but we need to enjoy our lives with our family. Practice in building effective sentences.Having self confidence could also improve our potentials in speaking English language well.Thank you very much!!!
T. Jeny

My fears in life are such as sudden death or diseases.

>>My fears in life are sudden death and disease.

Everyone cannot inevitable of death.

>>No one can fight death.

Steve jobs, found Apple Co., and die two years ago, even told us that death is the best invention of life.

>>Steve Jobs, the founder of Apple Co., died two years ago. Even if he mentioned that death is the best invention of life.

But, sudden death like car accidents or commit suicide is the most affected their family and friends.

>>Sudden death like car accidents or commit suicide can make a big impact to our family and friends.

If I did sudden death, my family and I don\'t have enough time to sharing feeling before death.

>>If I will die suddenly, I think I didn\'t spend enough time with my family.

That\'s terrible and I can\'t imagine of it.

>>That\'s terrible and I don\'t want to think about it.

I can\'t control sudden death or diseases that\'s why I have fears in my life. 

>>I can\'t control sudden death or disease, that\'s why I fear about life.

When I become parents, I should try to take care of my body for daughter.

>>When I became a parent, I need to take good care of my health for my daughter.

I go to hitting the gym third a week.

>>I hit the gym for three weeks now.

Even though I can\'t control sudden death, I can control my body\'s diseases by continuouly excrcise, regular medical checkup and slow food.

>>Even if I can\'t control sudden death, I can have continuous exercise, regular medical check-up and eat healthy food to prevent me from getting different kinds of disease.