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강사 첨삭
Hello there!
You have a good point here. It is true that the behavior of humans is the main factor why our natural resources are being destroyed and exploited. By the way, I made some corrections below. Kindly read and review them. Good night! ^_^
~T. Jenny
Most important thing to protect natural resources is people\'s behavior.
>>The most important factor to protect natural resources is people\'s behavior.
People used those long time ago and it\'s faster since Industiral Revolution.
>>People are using natural resources for a long time since Industrial Revolution.
Especially, oil and gas that must used for machines, cars and factories have spent so much until now.
>>We spend more on oil and gas that are use for machines, cars, and factories.
Scientists expect that oil maybe is depleted by 2100.
>>Scientists predicted that oil may depleted by 2100.
So, I suggest people who own of their business related to manufacture of car, machine or chemical companies must try to saving oil or gases.
>>I suggest people who have their own business related to manufacture of car, machine, or chemical should save oils and gases.
Also, citizens try to saving electric and trees etc.
>>Citizens should also try to save electricity, trees, etc.
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