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2013-01-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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Why do you think more and more people are getting interested in buying lottery tickets these days? Because common salary employee is only possible common life. But they win the first prize a public lottery, they don't need to work. The win the first prize is good than common salary employee work lifetime. In korea, the public lottery draw for winners every once a week. Always winner 5~10 peoples a week. They have everage a billion Korea won. In korea if it gether one billion, common salary employee for 20~25 years to gether that amount. So, many people buy it. I buy it too sometime. For reference, it is 1050 won against the dollar.

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Hello there!   Good argument. Here in the Phillippines, low income people has only one hope of getting out of poverty- and that is winning the lottery. However, some of these winners meet unfortunate circumstances too. There are a lot of incidents wherein the lottery winner is killed because he cashed his money and the thieves killed him with no mercy and got all his prize money. Many stories also say that some of the lottery winners were not able to manage their prize money. A lot of them were so generous that they gave all their money away and after a short span of time, they\'ve got nothing but a centavo. Some winners are also still hoping that they can get more that is why they still continue to buy tickets. Well honestly for me it\'s a really a good luck and blessing if you win the lottery or \" lotto\" we call it \" lotto\" here in the Philippines. Prize money is really a huge amount of money but as for me, I still believe in hardwork and perseverance, it is still better to indulge in shopping with the money you\'ve worked hard for. Nice point of view see you and ahhh.. may you win the next lottery draw!  Teacher Kristel Why o you think more and more people are getting interested in buying lottery tickets these days?>>Correct!Because common salary employee is only possible common life. >>Because common people have low salary and this is common for them.But they win the first prize a public lottery, they don\'t need to work. >> If they win the jackpot of the lottery, they don\'t need to work anymore.The win the first prize is good than common salary employee work lifetime. >>Winning the first prize is better than working for a lifetime for common people with low salary. In korea, the public lottery draw for winners every once a week. >> In Korea, the lottery draws winner once a week. Always winner 5~10 peoples a week. >> There are always 5 to 10 winners in a week. They have everage a billion Korea won. >> They win an average of 1 billion Korean won.In korea if it gether one billion, common salary employee for 20~25 years to gether that amount. >> In Korea, one billion is equivalent to the accumulated salary of a low income employee for 20- 25 years. So, many people buy it. >> That is the reason why people buy lottery tickets. I buy it too sometime. >> Sometimes I buy tickets too. For reference, it is 1050 won against the dollar. >> For your reference 1050 won is equal to 1 dollar.

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