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Hello [이름],

Aim for success, not perfection. Never give up your right to be wrong, because then you will lose the ability to learn new things and move forward with your life. 
T. Jeny

We lived around many media such as tv, movie and ads etc.

>>We are surrounded with media such as TV, movies, ads and etc.

I think tv is ok because broadcasting companies have to precensorhip before on-air.

>>I think TV is a good form of media, broadcasting companies have to check on their show before airing it online.

So, tv show or drama doesn\'t have scenes like smoking, drinking and erotic.

>>So, TV or drama shows don\'t have scenes like smoking, drinking and sensous scenes.  

The problem is movie or some internet ads.

>>The problem is with movies or some internet ads.

It can contain not only above those things but also curse, fight, murder and others.

>It contains curses, fights, murders and the like.

It must be affected by people. Actually, imitation crime sometimes have happened.

>>People will be affected with it. Actually the same crimes are happening in our society.

Especially, adolescent is very weak for imitation crime.

>>Especially, an adolescent can imitate crimes because they are weak.

They just do it as they were seen and sometimes it was irreversible.

>>correct

Parents must have pay attention to their children and need to talk with them.

>>Parents must pay their attention to their children and they need to talk with them.