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2013-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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When I was college student, my school had some problems. At that time, CCTV is not a common so that such as cell phone or laptop was stolen by others. Some people even stole bike, books and bags. To strong security, lots of schools installed CCTV everywhere except toilet. CCTV is far from toilet, now, we have another problem that women met often a pervert in toilet. As a result, school must intall emergency bell system all of women toilet for safe. If women touch it,it rings a bell loudly and security guard should be arrived 5 minute. It's almost 4 year ago and I don't know what is today's problem in college.

강사 첨삭

Hello there~~ Happy Wednesday!! This one\'s good! Just try to polish more on your vocabularies~~ Please check the corrections I made for you. Have a nice day..See you! T.Jeny When I was college student, my school had some problems. >>When I was a college student, my school had some problems.  At that time, CCTV is not a common so that such as cell phone or laptop was stolen by others. >>At that time, CCTV wasn\'t common so cell phones and laptops were usually stolen. Some people even stole bike, books and bags. To strong security, lots of schools installed CCTV everywhere except toilet. >>CORRECT!! For tighter security, lots of schools installed CCTVs everywhere except the toilets of course.  CCTV is far from toilet, now, we have another problem that women met often a pervert in toilet. >>The CCTV is far from the toilet so now the new problem is that women often meet a pervert in the toilet. As a result, school must intall emergency bell system all of women toilet for safe. >>As a response, the school must install emergency alarm system for all women to use for their safety.  If women touch it,it rings a bell loudly and security guard should be arrived 5 minute. >>If they touch it, the bell rings loudly and security guards should arrived within 5 minutes.It\'s almost 4 year ago and I don\'t know what is today\'s problem in college. >>It was almost 4 years ago so now I don\'t know what the common problems in colleges are.

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