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2013-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Hello Jeny. I prepared an essay today. Have a good day! Most threat to the environment is taking out the trash anywhere. Because there are not a lot of place to bury and the citizen desperately oppose to construction new landfill. So people should decrease their residential wastes include food waste. Anything that can be reused is put aside for recycling. Indiscriminate development also cause environmental problem because it destroy the forest. Once the forest destroyed it takes long time to recover. Green Growth Policy can be crucial to make better place to live for our babies.

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Hello there!Thank you for your good ideas. :p You\'re right, we have to preserve our mother nature in order for our future generations to have a better place to live. :p I hope that you\'re practicing what you\'re preaching. :p Please check out the corrections that I\'ve made below. Take care always! T. Jeny Hello Jeny. >>>Correct!I prepared an essay today. >>>Correct!Have a good day!>>>Correct!Most threat to the environment is taking out the trash anywhere. >>>The greatest threat to the environment is throwing garbage anywhere.Because there are not a lot of place to bury and the citizen desperately oppose to construction new landfill. >>>This is due to the fact that there is only a small space to dump the garbage and yet the citizens are desperately opposed to the construction of new sanitary landfills.So people should decrease their residential wastes include food waste. >>>So people should decrease their residential wastes which includes biodegradable wastes. Anything that can be reused is put aside for recycling. >>>Anything that can be reused should be put aside for recycling.Indiscriminate development also cause environmental problem because it destroy the forest. >>>Indiscriminate industrial development also causes environmental problems because it destroys the forests. Once the forest destroyed it takes long time to recover. >>>Once the forest is destroyed, it takes a long time in order for it to recover. Green Growth Policy can be crucial to make better place to live for our babies. >>>The Green Growth Policy is very crucial in making the environment a better place to live for our future generations.

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