Homework#25
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello! Good morning! It\'s getting cold here. In the last class, you said you will go to Manila for getting a visa. So, we don\'t have class next week. right? I am sorry about that.. Maybe you don\'t know I am interested in class because I can\'t express my opinion well. But I\'m really fun this class! Anyway, Here is my homework.
HW#25 What do you think about online grocery shopping?
I think it is really cool! I don\'t know how long it takes to be delivered in other countries.
In my country, If I order something like fruits, vegetables online, I could get the day when I order or the day after.
Also, Freshness of the things that I order is as much good as when I buy offline.
And another advantage is price. Market prices include human right expenses but online store price does not include that. So, online things is more cheap than market things.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jonathan!
Even if I\'m out next week, another teacher will substitute my class.
You can study with that teacher for the mean time.
Inform me in class later if you want to have substitution class.
Here are my corrections.
I think it is really cool! I don\'t know how long it takes to be delivered in other countries.
>>I think it is really cool! I don\'t know how long it takes to be delivered to other countries.
In my country, If I order something like fruits, vegetables online, I could get the day when I order or the day after.
>>In my country, if I order something like fruits and vegetables online, I could get them the day after I ordered or the next day later.
Also, Freshness of the things that I order is as much good as when I buy offline.
>>Also, the freshness of the things that I ordered online is as good as offline.
And another advantage is price. Market prices include human right expenses but online store price does not include that. So, online things is more cheap than market things.
>>And another advantage is the price. Market prices offline includes human right expenses, but online store price does not include that. So, online things are cheaper than market things.
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