Homework#26
학생이 쓴 원문
HW#26 In your opinion, how can students combat loneliness?
I think sports help students overcome their loneliness. In my case, when I was in students, overcoming loneliness was more difficult for me than studying. Emotion effects a lot of parts like studying and relationship. If you do sports, your emotion would be better than you don\'t do sports. For example, when my friend prepared scholastic ability test, my friend ruined his relationship even with me. After graduating school, my other friends and I met him. He said \"loneliness make me mad. That\'s why I was angry in school.\" He didn\'t do physical activities. So, I think it influence his emotion. In my case, whenever I felt loneliness, I was just going out. And then I played soccer with my friends. I felt my feeling was getting better.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jonathan. Thank you for this. Did you know that exercise actually stimulates the brain to produce happy hormones called endorphins. So I agree with you, doing sports can make one feel better.
- T. Beth
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I think sports help students overcome their loneliness. >>>> correct
In my case, when I was in students, overcoming loneliness was more difficult for me than studying.
>>>> In my case, when I was still a student, overcoming loneliness was more difficult for me than studying.
Emotion effects a lot of parts like studying and relationship.
>>>> Emotion affects a lot of parts like studying and relationship.
If you do sports, your emotion would be better than you don\'t do sports.
>>>> If you do sports, your emotion would be better than not doing sports.
For example, when my friend prepared scholastic ability test, my friend ruined his relationship even with me.
>>>> For example, when my friend prepared for the scholastic ability test, my friend ruined his relationship even with me.
After graduating school, my other friends and I met him.
>>>> correct
He said \"loneliness make me mad. That\'s why I was angry in school.\"
>>>> He said \"Loneliness made me mad. That\'s why I was angry in school.\"
He didn\'t do physical activities.
>>>> correct
So, I think it influence his emotion.
>>>> So, I think it influenced his emotion.
In my case, whenever I felt loneliness, I was just going out.
>>>> In my case, whenever I felt loneliness, I just went out.
And then I played soccer with my friends.
>>>> correct
I felt my feeling was getting better.
>>>> correct
>>>> I then felt better.
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