homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I do know that we need to be good models for our children. Yes it would be a difficult job and a challenge in our part as parents but with the proper guide of Our God Almighty everything is possible.
T. Jeny.
First of all, children will be affected by parents\' words, behaviors and life style since they were young.
>>First of all, children will be affected by parents\' words, behaviors and lifestyles.
Before go to school, most children spend their time with parents so, it is natural being affected by parents.
>>Before they go to school, children spend most of their time with parents so it is natural to be affected by them.
If parents who have positive mind, his children will always have positive thinking.
>>If parents have positive mind, their children will also have a positive way of thinking.
I taught in church for 4~6 ages since 2005, I can now discriminate children\'s personalities that maybe caused by parents.
>>I taught children of 4 to 6 years of age in our church since 2005, I can distinguish children\'s personalities that are caused by parents.
Some children always looks like gloomy that caused parents\' divorce.
>>Some children always look gloomy because their parents are divorce.
Otherwise, some children always very happy that means their family is peaceful.
>>On the other hand,some children are very happy which means their family is peaceful.
After being parents, we always have to careful our behaviors and words. Children don\'t know yet, what is right or wrong.
>>Before being parents, we always have to be careful of our behaviors and words. Children don\'t know yet what is right from wrong.
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