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2010-09-10 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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1-14 The more increase working mother, the more convenience working environment, f example, parental leave, nursery. 1-15 I can't imagine water shortage in Korea. We think we have much water so that we waste water. Consequently we will encount water shortage in the future. If water shortage comes, it will create many troubles like less drinking water, plants dried up, less washing water. I talked about overseas trip with my friend. We will go to Eastern Europe in next winter vacation. We have to start making money so I found part time job. However It was too late to find new job because most company already floated part timer.

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Hi [이름], You have a great idea on having a part time job. Don’t worry you can have it soon however for today you have to focus on your studies first I’ll see you tomorrow, have a great night, Connie  1-14The more increase working mother, the more convenience working environment,  f example, parental leave, nursery. >> The more working mother the working environment will be more convenient because of parental leave and nursery. 1-15I can't imagine water shortage in Korea. >> Correct  We think we have much water so that we waste water. >> We think that we have much water so we are wasting it. Consequently we will encount water shortage in the future. If water shortage  comes, it will create many troubles like less drinking water, plants dried up, less washing water. >> As a consequence we will encounter water shortage in the future. If water shortage will occur it will create much trouble because we will have less water to drink, the plants will dry up and we will no longer have water for our laundry. I talked about overseas trip with my friend. >> Correct  We will go to Eastern Europe in next winter vacation. >> Correct We have to start making money so I found part time job. >> We have to start making money so I’m trying to find time job. However It was too late to find new job because most company already floated part timer. >> However, it was too late to find a new job because most companies already hired par t timers.

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