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2013-02-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Industrial Revolution happened in UK early of 1900's since Earth is destroyed by people faster than before. People used many machines to make money and they didn't interest destroy our nature. As a result, some natural desasters start now. Every continents happened dry, flood, cold and hot. We shoul have more interest and careful when we have to develop some areas. Nature is not a ours. If it's not a recyling, we are guilty for our descendants. But, many people don't have interest of natural destroy until now. They cannot see bigger picture. If all nature is destroyed, people can't live anymore. All people must think about it.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름], 

Thank you for being concern of nature. We need to take a stand in helping the Earth.

Thank you for your opinion.

T. Jeny

Industrial Revolution happened in UK early of 1900\'s since Earth is destroyed by people faster than before.

>>Industrial Revolution happened in UK since 1900s when the Earth was destroyed by people. 

People used many machines to make money and they didn\'t interest destroy our nature. 

>>People used many machines to make money not knowing that they are destroying nature.

As a result, some natural desasters start now.

>>As a result, we are experiencing natural disaster.

Every continents happened dry, flood, cold and hot. 

>>Dry, flood, cold and hot weathers are happening in all continents.

We shoul have more interest and careful when we have to develop some areas.

>>We should have more interest in taking care of our nature in developing a certain area.

Nature is not a ours. If it\'s not a recyling, we are guilty for our descendants.

>>Nature is not ours. If we don\'t recycle, we will feel guilty for the next generation.

But, many people don\'t have interest of natural destroy until now.

>>But many people don\'t have interest in saving the Earth.

They cannot see bigger picture.

>>They cannot see the big picture.

If all nature is destroyed, people can\'t live anymore.

>>correct

All people must think about it.

>>correct

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