homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
Thank you for being concern of nature. We need to take a stand in helping the Earth.
Thank you for your opinion.
T. Jeny
Industrial Revolution happened in UK early of 1900\'s since Earth is destroyed by people faster than before.
>>Industrial Revolution happened in UK since 1900s when the Earth was destroyed by people.
People used many machines to make money and they didn\'t interest destroy our nature.
>>People used many machines to make money not knowing that they are destroying nature.
As a result, some natural desasters start now.
>>As a result, we are experiencing natural disaster.
Every continents happened dry, flood, cold and hot.
>>Dry, flood, cold and hot weathers are happening in all continents.
We shoul have more interest and careful when we have to develop some areas.
>>We should have more interest in taking care of our nature in developing a certain area.
Nature is not a ours. If it\'s not a recyling, we are guilty for our descendants.
>>Nature is not ours. If we don\'t recycle, we will feel guilty for the next generation.
But, many people don\'t have interest of natural destroy until now.
>>But many people don\'t have interest in saving the Earth.
They cannot see bigger picture.
>>They cannot see the big picture.
If all nature is destroyed, people can\'t live anymore.
>>correct
All people must think about it.
>>correct
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