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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
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The best way is proper mix.
>> The best way is to combine them.
We have some problems about social criminal and most of criminal happened by person who live alone.
>> We have some problems about social criminals, and most of crimes happen to people who live alone.
They have no friends and no family.
>> Correct.
To spend time alone, it\'s not bad but, if it\'s too much, we can\'t meet other people and can\'t adjust of environment.
>> To spend time alone is not bad, but if it\'s too much, we can\'t meet other people and can\'t adjust to the environment.
We can see some serious problems by alone person.
>> We can see that some people who are alone have some problems.
I like to spend time alone and with my people.
>> I like to spend time alone and with other people, too.
When I\'m tired, I want to spend time alone such as sleep, reading book, listen to music or watching TV.
>> When I\'m tired, I want to spend time alone through sleeping, reading books, listening to music or watching TV.
Except special case, I like to more spend time with my people.
>> Except for special cases, I like to spend time with other people more.
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