Homework 27

2016-08-03 · 첨삭 강사 camille

학생이 쓴 원문

Write about some event that influenced your life and made you realize that life is hard anyway. Make it as detailed as possible. 2 year ago, my friend suggested to me working at the japanese bar in vacation. so i accepted his proposal. the bar is opened from pm 7 to am 5. we had to work at night. It was fisrt part-time job to work at night. It made me extremely tired. because it means go against day and night. therefore i couldn't any activity without part time job. Also There were crowded as people on weekend. Certain people got drunk and crazy sometimes. Surely, pay was nice compared other convenient part-time job.

강사 첨삭

Good evening my dear Sun!Wow that was one hell of a ride! You impress me. Well, having a part time job is never esy but you made it. I am so proud of you!I can\'t wait to hear your voice again. Have a good night my dear... xoxoTeacher Cam^^ Write about some event that influenced your life and made you realize that life is hard anyway. Make it as detailed as possible.2 year ago, my friend suggested to me working at the japanese bar in vacation. >>2 years ago, my friend suggested me to work in a Japanese bar in vacation. so i accepted his proposal. >>correct the bar is opened from pm 7 to am 5. we had to work at night. >>correctIt was fisrt part-time job to work at night. >>It was my first time to work at night. It made me extremely tired. >>correct because it means go against day and night. >>correct therefore i couldn\'t any activity without part time job. >>Therefore, I couldn\'t do anything without my part time job.Also There were crowded as people on weekend. >>The place was also crowded on weekends. Certain people got drunk and crazy sometimes. >>Certain people got drunk and did crazy things sometimes.Surely, pay was nice compared other convenient part-time job. >>Surely, the pay was nice compared with the other convenient part time jobs.  

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