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2013-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Leny

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I think I can explain myself by these three words. I'm not used to tell my story to others but I'm a good 'listener'. I used to listen carefully other's stories and agree with them and then, give them some advise or consolation. So, a lot of my friends prefer to tell me their serious problems. In addition, I never tell anothers their secret, so they believe me as a person who they can open their heart to. Secondly, I'm a 'humorous' person. Although i'm introverted at a first meeting, after being close, I like to tell them interesting stories and joke. And I'm used to lead a atmosphere of the meeting. Therefore, people think me as a interesting and energetic person. Lastly, I'm 'sentimental'. My emotion is very fruitful. When I was teenager, I didn't know how controll my mind, so my feeling was changed a lot according to each situation. After grew up, I can controll my emotion to some degree. Now, I don't used to express my feeling to out side. But I still have a emotional mind.

강사 첨삭

Hello There!!

Thank you very much for sharing this great story.

I am really touched! You are a good person.^^

I can feel that you are a person who can be trusted.

Again, thank you very much and have a nice day.

See you in class.

Teacher Nina^_^

I think I can explain myself by these three words.

>>Correct!!

 I\'m not used to tell my story to others but I\'m a good \'listener\'.

>>I\'m not used to tell my story to other people but I\'m a good listener.

I used to listen carefully other\'s stories and agree with them and then, give them some advise or consolation.

>>I used to listen carefully to other\'s stories and I agree with them, and then I give them some advise or consolation.
So, a lot of my friends prefer to tell me their serious problems.

>>Correct!!

In addition, I never tell anothers their secret, so they believe me as a person who they can open their heart to. 

>>In addition, I never tell other people\'s secret, so they believe in me as a true person whom they can open their hearts to.

Secondly, I\'m a \'humorous\' person. Although i\'m introverted at a first meeting, after being close, I like to tell them interesting stories and joke.

>>Secondly, I\'m a \"humorous\" person. Although I\'m introvert at first meeting; after being close, I like to tell them interesting stories and jokes.

And I\'m used to lead a atmosphere of the meeting. Therefore, people think me as a interesting and energetic person. 

>>And I am the one who is used to lead a good atmosphere in the meeting. Therefore, people think of me as an interesting and energetic person.

Lastly, I\'m \'sentimental\'. My emotion is very fruitful. When I was teenager, I didn\'t know how controll my mind, so my feeling was changed a lot according to each situation.

>>Lastly, I\'m a \"sentimental\" person. My emotion is very fruitful. When I was a teenager, I didn\'t know how to control my mind. So, my feelings has changed a lot in a different situation. 

After grew up, I can controll my emotion to some degree. Now, I don\'t used to express my feeling to out side. But I still have a emotional mind.

>>After I grow up, I can control my emotions to some degree. Now, I can control expressing my feelings. But I still have an emotional mind.

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