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2013-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Science technology is very improved now so, we can check internet or email everywhere when you have a IT products. Just 5 years ago, if you want to check email or want to watching TV or want to use internet service, you must use your computer or laptop. But, you shouldn't need anymore nowadays. Just have smartphone or iPad. It can be help you. It's smaller, comfort and cheaper than computer. Especially, iPad is very useful. It can contain much contents that if it was a book, we need so many books to contain of contents. But, iPad is solution. As a result, many people buy it so, some schools use it for education. I saw articles that some universities, USA, support iPad for their students and there is no charge. I think that's great and students also very satisfied. More advanced technology, we can more comfortable life.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

Giving your opinion about the topic will also increase your knowledge in English. Great step for you to achieve your success.

I know that we do have a very fast paced development in terms of our technology nowadays. These could really make our lives convenient but I still do hope that people could adjust to the changes.

T. Jeny

Science technology is very improved now so, we can check internet or email everywhere when you have a IT products.

>>Science technology is very improved nowadays. We can check the internet or create an email anywhere, if you have an IT product.

Just 5 years ago, if you want to check email or want to watching TV or want to use internet service, you must use your computer or laptop.

>>Five years ago, if you wanted to check my email ,watch TV or use the internet service, you must use your computer or laptop.

But, you shouldn\'t need anymore nowadays. Just have smartphone or iPad.

>>But it\'s different now, you just need a smart phone or ipod t do these things.

It can be help you.

>>correct

It\'s smaller, comfort and cheaper than computer.

>>It\'s more comfortable, smaller and cheaper than having a computer.

Especially, iPad is very useful.

>>Especially iPad, It is very useful.

It can contain much contents that if it was a book, we need so many books to contain of contents.

>>It is like a book that contain a lot of contents.

But, iPad is solution.

>>Having an iPad is a solution.

As a result, many people buy it so, some schools use it for education.

>>As a result, some schools use it for education, that is why many people buy it.

I saw articles that some universities, USA, support iPad for their students and there is no charge.

>>I read an article some universities in US give ipad to their students for free.

I think that\'s great and students also very satisfied.

>>I think that\'s great and it could satisfy the need of the students.

More advanced technology, we can more comfortable life.

>>If we develop our technology more, it can make our lives comfortable.

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