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2013-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Travel is one of the way for learning diffrent culture. Each people and countires have their own cultures and they lived a diffrent life compared to us. So, I think going to travel is learning to their culture. And go to museums is the best way for learning culture. Museums have many relics and tresures with very specific information which contains about it's history. I recommend people who have a children must go to museums when people in other citis. It must be valuable experience for your children and many people really do that. I personally like to go to museums or some traditional places than shoppling mall or new buildings. Becuase I'm interesting about history and relics. If we have knowledge about history of travel citis, your travel will be more fun and nice.

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Hi there^^ A very nice composition you made! You really must be very good about histories of other cities. Right? Yes travelling, it is a way to learn the cultures of other people. And it would be very nice to know how people live in a certain place where you will be visiting or planning to visit. Maybe if people will know the importance of their city, they would be more interested to go to places like museums. Well, you gave me a great idea! Thank you for that!=) Have a nice day ahead and take care^^ ~Teacher Jeny Travel is one of the way for learning diffrent culture. >>Travelling is one of the ways where we can learn different cultures. Each people and countires have their own cultures and they lived a diffrent life compared to us. >>Every country has its own culture and people lived differently from each other. So, I think going to travel is learning to their culture. >>So I think travelling is learning other people\'s cultures. And go to museums is the best way for learning culture. >>Going to museums is the best way to learn other people\'s cultures. Museums have many relics and tresures with very specific information which contains about it\'s history. >>Museums have many relics and treasures with their specific information which includes its history. I recommend people who have a children must go to museums when people in other citis. >>I recommed those people with children to go to museums and meet other people. It must be valuable experience for your children and many people really do that. >>Many people do this and it might be a very memorable experience for their children.I personally like to go to museums or some traditional places than shoppling mall or new buildings. >>I prefer to go to museums or traditional places than to go to malls and other buildings. Becuase I\'m interesting about history and relics. >>Because I am interested about history and relics. If we have knowledge about history of travel citis, your travel will be more fun and nice. >>If we are knowledgable about the history of other cities, our travel would be more fun.

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