homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Many Koreans prefer to live in apartment because they think it's comfortable and safe. As you know, people have lived together their citizens in apartment. We called neighbors. Some of them are very closer not only parents but children. But, some of people hate each other.
Thesedays, one of our social problem is noise between neighbors. As a result, sometimes terrible things happened like violence and murder. Especially, it happened in apartment and caused by apartment citizens. Family who have children or baby has to be careful their noisy.
We should try to effort to not impede our neighbors' rest and privacy.
강사 첨삭
Hello there,
Hello it\'s terrible that being noisy in our neighborhood could create or result to crimes. but we need to be careful this days.
I do hope that you are really learning from my class.
Have a nice day!!!
T. Jeny
Many Koreans prefer to live in apartment because they think it\'s comfortable and safe.
>>Many Koreans prefer to live in an apartment because they think it\'s comfortable and safe.
As you know, people have lived together their citizens in apartment.
>>As you know, people have lived together with other people in their neighborhood.
We called neighbors.
>>correct
Some of them are very closer not only parents but children.
>>Some of them are very close with each other.
But, some of people hate each other.
>>correct
Thesedays, one of our social problem is noise between neighbors.
>>These days, one of our social problems is noise between neighbors.
As a result, sometimes terrible things happened like violence and murder.
>>As a result, terrible things like violence and murder happen sometimes.
Especially, it happened in apartment and caused by apartment citizens.
>>Especially, it is caused by their neighbors.
Family who have children or baby has to be careful their noisy.
>>Families with children should be careful in creating noise.
We should try to effort to not impede our neighbors\' rest and privacy.
>>We should try to do our best not to impede our neighbors rest time and privacy.
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