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Until five years ago, I don't have a bed. Because when I came to Seoul to live alone, I didn't have much money so, I wasn't able to buy expensive furniture. Fortunately, sleeping and living on the floor are korean tradition so, I didn't need to buy a sofa and a bed which is one of the most expensive furniture. One day, I had a backache and I told it to my father. Few days later was my birthday and my father sent me a bed as a gift. After using it, my back and waist became better. In addition, the reason why I like it is that the bed has drawers. I live in one room house and my room is too small but I have a lot of clothes. It was hard to contain all of my clothes on the closet and drawers. But I gained extra drawers by buying a bed. My bed is very efficient and useful so, I still use it very well.

Good evening [이름]! Thank you for sending me an essay. I enjoyed reading your composition.You were able to express yourself well. I am glad that you use different vocabularies to express your ideas.I know you were really happy when you received the bed.What do you want for your birthday?Tell me your reason.See you tomorrow!Sweetdreams! Teacher Nina! Here are my corrections for you: Until five years ago, I don\'t have a bed. >>>Until five years ago, I didn\'t have a bed. Because when I came to Seoul to live alone, I didn\'t have much money so, I wasn\'t able to buy expensive furniture. >>>This is because when I came to Seoul to live alone, I didn\'t have much money so I wasn\'t able to buy expensive furnitures. Fortunately, sleeping and living on the floor are korean tradition so, I didn\'t need to buy a sofa and a bed which is one of the most expensive furniture.  >>>Fortunately, sleeping and living on the floor are Korean traditions. So I didn\'t need to buy a sofa and a bed, which is one of the most expensive furniture.One day, I had a backache and I told it to my father. >>>One day, I had a backache and I told my father about it. Few days later was my birthday and my father sent me a bed as a gift. >>>A few days after my birthday, my father sent me a bed as a gift. After using it, my back and waist became better. >>>Correct! In addition, the reason why I like it is that the bed has drawers.  >>>Correct! I live in one room house and my room is too small but I have a lot of clothes. >>>I live in a one-room house. My room is too small but I have a lot of clothes. It was hard to contain all of my clothes on the closet and drawers. >>>Correct! But I gained extra drawers by buying a bed. >>>Correct! My bed is very efficient and useful so, I still use it very well. >>>Correct!