Homework#28
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, teacher! It\'s been two and a half months since we talk on the phone. Time is really fast.. But, I have same mindset when I got a class in first time. I will be trying to study English harder and harder. :)
HW#28 What is your opinion about children labor?
I think children labor is neccesary in some parts because there are children who have to earn money for making a their living.
But, age restritions are also needed. The reason why they are needed is that there are some employers who do bad deed like not giving a pay and deceiving their employees. So, I think it is okay for the children whose age is upper than 18 to earn money because they can judge what is bad. And the children who is lower than 18 are protected in government system like supporting money until they will be 18.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Jonathan!
I suggest you to study in your free time.
Then, ask me many questions in class.
Here are my corrections.
I think children labor is neccesary in some parts because there are children who have to earn money for making a their living.
>>I think children labor is necessary somehow because there are children who have to earn money to make a living.
But, age restritions are also needed. The reason why they are needed is that there are some employers who do bad deed like not giving a pay and deceiving their employees.
>>But, age restrictions are also needed. The reason why they are needed is that there are some employers who do bad deeds, like not giving a pay and deceiving their employees.
So, I think it is okay for the children whose age is upper than 18 to earn money because they can judge what is bad.
>>So, I think it is okay for the children whose age is 18 and above to earn money because they can judge what is bad or what is good.
And the children who is lower than 18 are protected in government system like supporting money until they will be 18.
>>And the children who are lower than 18 are protected by the government, like supporting money until they will be 18.
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