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Between North Korea and South Korea is the only divided country of all ovr the world. So, between two countries always happens about war. Some people say that if World War 3 will happen, it's casued by North Korea and South Korea. It's really serious problem. Especially, these days, North Korea continuosly threathed us if South Korea and USA will have war training, they will start war. That's the why many Koreans worried about what war starts sooner. Anyway, women can go to Army in Korea and the number is few until now. Men have a prejudice that women is weaker than men so they can't perform in army activities. I agree women is weaker than men but, they are sensitive and have benefit that haven't men. So, if women go to army, they might perform very well.

Hi there!!! ^^ Great job with your homework. I appreciate you doing your best in expressing your thoughts about this issue. ^^ Here are just some corrections and suggestions to better deliver your thought. Keep up the great job! And have a wonderful weekend ahead. Teacher Jeny ^_^   Between North Korea and South Korea is the only divided country of all ovr the world. >> North Korea and South Korea is the only divided contry all over the world. So, between two countries always happens about war. >> So, there\'s a war happening between these two countries. Some people say that if World War 3 will happen, it\'s casued by North Korea and South Korea. >> CORRECT! It\'s really serious problem. >> It\'s a really serious problem. Especially, these days, North Korea continuosly threathed us if South Korea and USA will have war training, they will start war. >> Especially these days, North Korea continously threaten us. If South Korea and the USA will have a war training they will start a war. That\'s the why many Koreans worried about what war starts sooner. >> That\'s the reason why many Koreans are worried if war will start soon. Anyway, women can go to Army in Korea and the number is few until now. >> Anyway, women can go to army in Korea and their numbers are still few. Men have a prejudice that women is weaker than men so they can\'t perform in army activities. >> CORRECT! I agree women is weaker than men but, they are sensitive and have benefit that haven\'t men. >> So, if women go to army, they might perform very well. >>