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2013-03-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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I think most of men like a car and they want to buy a super-car like Porche or Lamborgini as like me. So, my wish is to receive super-car. Actually, I envy people who have a super-car that looks like very nice. Especially, sometimes I saw young people drove super-car. Most of them, their parents bought for children and that's true becuase they don't have enough money. Of course, my parents present Hyundai motor for my family and I really appreciate but, my greed is more. If people have little greed, we can live more satisfactory life.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!!! ^^ WOW!!! That\'s a very expenssive wish. But who knows, with hard work and determination maybe you can gift yourself a super-car someday. ^^ Just believe and work for it. ^^ Have a great evening ahead. Teacher Jeny ^_^   I think most of men like a car and they want to buy a super-car like Porche or Lamborgini as like me. >>I think most men like cars and they want to buy super-car like Porche or Lamborgini, just like me. So, my wish is to receive super-car. >> So, my wish is to recieve a super-car. Actually, I envy people who have a super-car that looks like very nice. >> Actually, I envy people who have a super-car that looks very nice. Especially, sometimes I saw young people drove super-car. >> Especially when I see young people who drives super-cars. Most of them, their parents bought for children and that\'s true becuase they don\'t have enough money. >> MAYBE YOU MEAN TO SAY: Their parents bought it for most of them becuase they don\'t have enough money. Of course, my parents present Hyundai motor for my family and I really appreciate but, my greed is more. >> Of course, my parents present was a Hyundai motor for my family and I really appreciate it but I want more. If people have little greed, we can live more satisfactory life. >> If people are not very greedy we can live a satisfied life.

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