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Hello [이름],
Being neglected in the society or in your own family can cause of inferiority complex, so I think we all know that we have a big responsibility to our family and society. Thank you for expressing your opinion in our topic.
T. Jeny
I haven\'t experienced when I was young so, I tell you in my opinion what is really terrifying that is indifference.
>>I haven\'t experienced that when I was young but I can tell you about my opinion that indifference is terrifying.
Indifference is caused by violences like murder or assult.
>>Indifference is caused by violence like murder or assault.
They have no reasons and just hated looks like happy or smiling people.
>>They have no reasons behind but they seem to look happy.
People who had indifference when they were young have quite hated for society.
>>People who were neglected when they were young have a feeling of hatred for the society.
So, I think love is very important because people can\'t live alone.
>>correct
We must relationship with each other.
>>We must have a good relationship with each other.
>>We must create a good relationship with each other.
Korea has saying that most horrifying is not a poverty, hunger but a indifference.
>>Korea has a saying that poverty or hunger is not horrifying but indifference.
>>Korea has a saying that indifference is a horrifying experience and not poverty or hunger.
We have to take care of family, friends and neighbors.
>>We have to take care of our family, friends and neighbors.
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