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2013-04-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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First of all, my parents are the most influential people in my life. They gave to enough love and attention that's the why I love them and thank them. I guess most people who have parents will choice their parents at first. And my wife is too. She is alway smiling when she was tired. She gives to me encourge when I depressed. She is always praying for our family. She always speaks that we're happy and have to positism. Those are helpful in my life. As a result, I have a mind that help for poor or disabled and positive is very strong. People have to meet good people because of resembled each other. People's word, action and mind will influenced each other. That's the main reason our parents want to meet good friends. We have a perborb that He who touches pitch shall be defiled therewith. I think that's true.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

I was nice of you to talk about your wife. I guess you\'re very proud of her. I do believe that in every success of a man is a woman. So keep it up!!! I\'m very proud of you!!

T. Jeny


First of all, my parents are the most influential people in my life.

>>correct

They gave to enough love and attention that\'s the why I love them and thank them.

>>They gave enough love and attention that\'s why I lover and thank them.

I guess most people who have parents will choice their parents at first. 

>>I guess most people who have parents will choose their parents first.

And my wife is too.

>>My my wife too.

She is alway smiling when she was tired.

>>She\'s always smiling when she is tired.

She gives to me encourge when I depressed.

>>She encourages me when I\'m depressed. 

She is always praying for our family. 

>>correct

She always speaks that we\'re happy and have to positism.

>>She always says that we need to be positive and be happy.

Those are helpful in my life.

>>correct

As a result, I have a mind that help for poor or disabled and positive is very strong. 

>>As a result, I have a strong passion in caring for the poor or disabled.

People have to meet good people because of resembled each other.

>>People should meet people that resemble them.

People\'s word, action and mind will influenced each other.

>>People\'s word,action and mind will influence other people.

That\'s the main reason our parents want to meet good friends.

>>That\'s the main reason our parents want us to meet good friends.

We have a perborb that He who touches pitch shall be defiled therewith.

>>Whe have a proverb that says, \"he who touches pitch shall be defiled therewith.\"

I think that\'s true.

>>correct

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