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2013-04-12 · 첨삭 강사 Ronnie

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Hi John, I arrived in X USA last Monday. We left X Rome, flew over X Alps and made a quick stop in X London. There we went shopping in X Harrods, visited the Tower and enjoyed a sunny afternoon in X Hyde Park. On the following day we left for X New York. The time on board wasn't boring as there were two films to watch on the monitor. The people on the plane were all X Italian. Before we landed at the JFK airport, we saw the Statue of Liberty, the Ellis Island and the Empire State Building. The hotel I stayed in was on the corner of the 42nd Street and the 5th Avenue. I don't like the hotels very much, but I didn't have the time to rent an apartment. Please say hello to Peter and Mandy. Yours, [이름]

강사 첨삭

An exciting Friday to both of us.

I hope you have started the day right.

Thank you for making and sending in your composition.

Anyways, please review your assignment during your free time.

I\'ll see you in class.^^

Take care.

_T. Ronnie_

Hi John,

>> CORRECT!!
I arrived in X USA last Monday.

>> I arrived in THE USA last Monday.

We left X Rome, flew over X Alps and made a quick stop in X London.

>>We left X Rome, flew over THE Alps and made a quick stop in X London.

There we went shopping in X Harrods, visited the Tower and enjoyed a sunny afternoon in X Hyde Park.

>>There we went shopping in X Harrods, visited THE Tower and enjoyed a sunny afternoon in X Hyde Park

On the following day we left for X New York.

>>Correct!

The time on board wasn\'t boring as there were two films to watch on the monitor.

>>Correct!

The people on the plane were all X Italian. Before we landed at the JFK airport, we saw the Statue of Liberty, the Ellis Island and the Empire State Building.  

>>THE people on the plane were all X Italian. Before we landed at X JFK airport, we saw THE Statue of Liberty, X Ellis Island and THE Empire State Building.

The hotel I stayed in was on the corner of the 42nd Street and the 5th Avenue. 

>>THE hotel I stayed in was on the corner of X 42nd Street and X 5th Avenue.

I don\'t like the hotels very much, but I didn\'t have the time to rent an apartment.

>> I don\'t like X hotels very much, but I didn\'t have X time to rent an apartment.
Please say hello to Peter and Mandy.

>> CORRECT!!
Yours,
Peter

>> CORRECT!!

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