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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
This one is so cool!
You got brilliant ideas there, dear^^
Thank you so much for sending this in.
Maybe we can still talk about this in class, if you don\'t mind.
Just tell me, okay?
Well, I will see you in a while!^^
Is mental health more important than physical health?
I think mental health is more important than physal health.
>>Correct [spelling check: physical]
Above all, we have to place the priority to the mental health bexause I had heard \"A healthy mind leads to a healthy body\" from a child.
>>Above all, we have to prioritize mental health because I heard, \"A healthy mind leads to a healthy body,\" from a child. [spelling check:because]
And if our mental isn\'t healthy, we could easily feel the helpness.
>>And if our mind is not healthy, we can easily feel so helpless.
Furthermore, there is the possibility of tending to neglect our body health.
>>Furthermore, there is this tendency to neglect our body\'s health.
Therefore, to be healthier than an usual, we preferentially have to control our mental health.
>>Therefore, to be healthier than usual, we should prefer to have control over our mental health.
And then, by doing a light exercise, we can eaily take care of our body.
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