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2013-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Is mental health more important than physical health? I think mental health is more important than physal health. Above all, we have to place the priority to the mental health bexause I had heard "A healthy mind leads to a healthy body" from a child. And if our mental isn't healthy, we could easily feel the helpness. Furthermore, there is the possibility of tending to neglect our body health. Therefore, to be healthier than an usual, we preferentially have to control our mental health. And then, by doing a light exercise, we can eaily take care of our body.

강사 첨삭

This one is so cool!

You got brilliant ideas there, dear^^

Thank you so much for sending this in.

Maybe we can still talk about this in class, if you don\'t mind.

Just tell me, okay?

Well, I will see you in a while!^^

Is mental health more important than physical health?
I think mental health is more important than physal health.

>>Correct [spelling check: physical]
Above all, we have to place the priority to the mental health bexause I had heard \"A healthy mind leads to a healthy body\" from a child.

>>Above all, we have to prioritize mental health because I heard, \"A healthy mind leads to a healthy body,\" from a child. [spelling check:because]
And if our mental isn\'t healthy, we could easily feel the helpness.

>>And if our mind is not healthy, we can easily feel so helpless.

Furthermore, there is the possibility of tending to neglect our body health.

>>Furthermore, there is this tendency to neglect our body\'s health.
Therefore, to be healthier than an usual, we preferentially have to control our mental health.

>>Therefore, to be healthier than usual, we should prefer to have control over our mental health.

And then, by doing a light exercise, we can eaily take care of our body.

>>Correct! [spelling check: easily]

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