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Korean teenagers can't have jobs when they're student, but they can have part-time jobs. Many teenagers have experienced to work during vacation. I think it's good because they'll know how tough makes money as a result, they should try to save money. When I was student, I wanted to work but I have totally diffrent thinking now. I realized to make money is really hard and tired.
Anyway, most of teenagers have worked in fast-food restuarants. But, be careful of your employer, especailly if you were women. Some employers are really wicked person. They try to not to pay and even sexual assult. Please don't hesitate and call 911, if you want to help. You should think what is right action.
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Korean teenagers can\'t have jobs when they\'re student, but they can have part-time jobs.
>> CORRECT!
Many teenagers have experienced to work during vacation.
>> Many teenagers had experienced to work during vacation.
I think it\'s good because they\'ll know how tough makes money as a result, they should try to save money. >> I think it\'s good for them to have part-time jobs so that they\'ll know how tough to make money and as a result they will try to save money.
When I was student, I wanted to work but I have totally diffrent thinking now.
>> When I was a student, I wanted to work. But now I have a totally different perspective.
I realized to make money is really hard and tired. >> I realized, to make money is really hard and tiring.
Anyway, most of teenagers have worked in fast-food restuarants. >> Anyway, most teenagers worked at a fast-food restuarant.
But, be careful of your employer, especailly if you were women.
>> But be careful with your employer, especially if you are a woman.
Some employers are really wicked person. >> Some employers are really wicked people.
They try to not to pay and even sexual assult.
>> They try not to give you pay and even do sexual assults.
Please don\'t hesitate and call 911, if you want to help. >> Please don\'t hesitate to call 911 if you need help.
You should think what is right action.
>> You should think the right thing to do.
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