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Good evening [이름]! 

It\'s a TGIF again!
I hope that you\'re very excited for tomorrow.

Anyway, please review the corrections below.

You\'re right.

In a way, these kinds of activities can relieve stress.

However, for some people, they find that their stress doubled or even tripled because of the noise.

It all depends on the person.

I\'ll see you again next week.

Enjoy your weekend.

T. Jeny

I really recommend you to attending a live performance that whatever.

>>>I really recommend that you should try attending any live performances.

It\'s really fun, nice and beathtaking.

>>>It\'s really fun, nice, and breath taking.

You can enjoy many people together and can make a new friends who maybe hit it off with you.

>>>You can socialize with many people and yo can make new friends who may hit off with you.

But, if you want to take a rest, you should watch TV in your home.

>>>But if you want to take a rest, you should watch TV at home.

Healthy is more important than attend activities. 

>>>Our health is more important than attending activities.
I like to attending a live show especially, sports and concerts.

>>>I like attending a live show especially that of sports and concerts.

After attend rock concert, my stress was gone and it\'s refresh to me. 

>>>After attending rock concerts, my stress was gone and it refreshes me.

Nowadays, people have too much stress and it caused by criminals or commit suicide. 

>>>Nowadays, people are too stressed and it causes them to become criminals or to commit suicide.

Stress is very dangerous so, we must demolish our stress.

>>>Stress is very dangerous so we must be able to relieve our stress.

I recommend you if you have too much stress, you should go to concerts or sports performance.

>>>I recommend that if you are too stressed, you should go to concerts or sport performances.

It\'s helpful to you.

>>>It would be helpful to you.