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2013-04-24 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Essay: If you could hold a world record in something, what would it be? How would you go about attaining this world record? How would it feel being a world record holder? I want to hold a world record in traveling the most countires. I've always draemed about traveling the world since i was young. So i collected calender pictures that showed landmarks around world, and everytime i looked that pictures i thought oneday i would go that places. But until now i didn't achielve the goal that i had in mind when i was young looking the caleneders. If i excuse myself, i didn't have time and money to do. But no more excuses getting in my way to achieve the goal, for the starter i plan to go Europ after i am discharged from the army. And then i will save money for my second journey. i am thinking of South America for my second journey. Being the best feels always good. I think that's what a world record holder feels about.

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I wish that you will truly achieve your goal. Don\'t give up whenever you encounter hindrance in achieving your goal, just go for it and soon, you will be able to attain it. See you! T. Kathrine Essay: If you could hold a world record in something, what would it be? How would you go about attaining this world record? How would it feel being a world record holder?I want to hold a world record in traveling the most countires. >>Correct! >>OR: I want to hold a world record for the most places a person can travel. I\'ve always draemed about traveling the world since i was young. >>I\'ve always dreamed of traveling the world since I was young.  So i collected calender pictures that showed landmarks around world, and everytime i looked that pictures i thought oneday i would go that places. >>So, I collected calendar pictures that showed the landmarks around the world, and everytime I look at the pictures, I always thought that one day I will go to those places. But until now i didn\'t achielve the goal that i had in mind when i was young looking the caleneders. >>But until now, I haven\'t achieved the goal that I have in mind. If i excuse myself, i didn\'t have time and money to do. >> If I excuse myself, I didn\'t have time and money to do it. But no more excuses getting in my way to achieve the goal, for the starter i plan to go Europ after i am discharged from the army. >>But no more excuses in achieving the goal. Starting now, I plan to go to Europe after I will be discharged from the army. And then i will save money for my second journey. >> And then, I will save money for my second journey. I am thinking of South America for my second journey. >>Correct!Being the best feels always good. >>Correct! I think that\'s what a world record holder feels about. >>Correct!

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