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I think that silver town is very good and important facility in these days. Have been developing technology, people became to live longer with healthy body. The amount of the old is increasing steadly, therefore we need more organizations which help and take care of them. A silver town is able to deal with all programs for the old more efficiently. In my opinion, most of them should be managed by the government and the fund for them is provided by us. The aged are not only our parents but also our figure of future.

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I think that silver town is very good and important facility in these days.
>>I think that silver town is a very good and important facility these days.

Have been developing technology, people became to live longer with healthy body.

>>Because of our developing technology, people can live longer with a healthy body.

The amount of the old is increasing steadly, therefore we need more organizations which help and take care of them.

>>The number of the old is increasing steadily, therefore we need more organizations to help and take care of them.

A silver town is able to deal with all programs for the old more efficiently.

>>Correct

 In my opinion, most of them should be managed by the government and the fund for them is provided by us.

>>Correct

The aged are not only our parents but also our figure of future.

>>The aged are not only our parents but are also the figure of our future.