HOMEWORK 2nd related with previous topic.

Hi [이름],

Thanks for taking the time to answer your homework. I truly appreciate it. And you did good on your essay. There were several grammatical flaws, but with more practice, you can improve remarkably.

See you!

Cheers,

Amanda

In your opinion, is it right for wild animals to stay in the Zoo instead of in the forest? Please explain your answer.

The place is wide and the aquarium made with mirror so the bear cannot see the people from outside. The researcher said the animals are in the shelter cannot going back to the wildlife so they try to make the place close to nature.

>> The place is wide and the aquarium was made of mirror. They cannot see the people outside, but the people can see them. The researcher said that the animals in the shelter cannot go back to the wildlife, so they try to make the place as close to nature as possible  (OR: look like their natural habitat.)

 To conclude The zoo stop purchasing for show animals. I do support some organization protects the injured animals in the shelter, however, they must keep the identify the purpose of the place.
>> To conclude, the zoo stopped purchasing animals that are used for amusement shows. I do support some organizations who protects injured animals by moving them in a shelter, however, they must identify the purpose or objectives of building such places.  

To Amanda
Hi! It was a little longer than 1,000 letter so I had to devided by the way I am not familiar with the Essay writting form. I need to practice to more times :)

>> It was a little longer than 1,000 letters, so I had to divide it. OR: It was a little longer than 1,000 letters, so I uploaded them separately. By the way, I am not familiar with the Essay writting form. I need to practice more.